Pretty funny, but drags
Pretty fantastic. You've got the Facebook layout down pat, from the little row photos of Amy to the column of friends, to the sponsored links. Speaking of sponsored links, I see why you made it an 'M' rating. You've even cared to state your mutual friends as to include Alien Hominid, a troll, and Chris Crocker (I can't identify the rest). Everything is produced well, from the graphics to the sound it makes when an update is submitted.
The storyline of a girl making countless FB status updates is a simple yet effective concept. As well as making that continued joke, there are small amusing things such as a boyfriend cheating on her in the bathroom, and then repeated in her dream. I do find though, that the humour droops a little toward the end when speech bubbles start coming from your profile picture. It kinda states what we've already gathered, like "She posts all the time, it's annoying". I think we got that already, you don't have to say it.
By the way you conveyed this, I thought you were ditching the dirt on someone you knew that did this all the time. At first I guessed that Amy Bell was your sister, but then I looked at your author comments and saw that she was just one of "those girls". That is unless the athore comments al totol lies!
It's got a certain polish to it that does tend to surprise, but not amaze. The humour is very tight and professional at the beginning, and the statuses keep coming at the perfect pace. Then things start to get a little boring, and that's just before the speech bubble comes in. I suggest you should have done something like "Woke up. School again". So that it has that sort of looping factor, as if this happens every day. No need for speech bubbles.
So it was a great concept that is realistic and funny, but drags on for a bit and is impaired by a sluggish ending. It was kind of a "this is why I made this and this is why it's funny so laugh" moment. Not a good look. But mostly this was clearly funny fare, even despite what EpicFail and the others said. Just needs a little polishing. Thanks for letting me watch.
--Production-- = 17/20
--Experience-- = 16/20
--Style-- = 17/20
--Wow Factor-- = 15/20
--Personal Tilt-- = 16/20
OVERALL SCORE: 81/100
--REVIEW REQUEST CLUB--
Thank you, it certainly needs to be fixed up in some areas. I'll try my best at to make it funnier, next time.
The art is middling to good, most animations very smooth and nice, with potent realism. The epicness of the battle is entailed by the enormous introduction compared with the piddly-length fight scene. In usual fight flashes, the fight is supposed to last at least 10x the duration of the intro, and even then people beg for more. Sure, have an intro, but don't let it drown your piece.
The characterisation of the two people was unique and different for each one. The two were mainly identified by their respective weapons: one gladiator has a sawblade, or what looks like Auron's blade in Final Fantasy; and the other has a 'twister', some deadly boomerang slicing thing. The battle that ensues after the build-up is tight and compact, with a lot of style. This flash grasps your attention span from the beginning to beyond. Now make it longer.
The idea behind this to make two gladiators fight in the ring is not a terribly original one, but most stick movies aren't supposed to have much of a plot anyway. It was just starting to look good and then the credits came up, ensuing in the perfect "WTF!" moment.
The art style is generally well used, even if it doesn't have excessive amounts of detail, it serves the purpose of the flash. The music was epic but had elements of cheesiness in an all-out brawl that lacked subtlety. What we liked about, for example, the SHOCK series is that the stick figure hero has a lot of wit and quick thinking that we struggle to keep up with. That makes that 'wow' factor.
Overall, unlike SCTE3, I'm a fan of stick fights, if made well. They demonstrate good animation ability without having to be an artistic Van Gogh. :) What I would recommend are two things: the first is obviously the length, to make the fight scene at least 10x longer; the second is to incorporate a storyline and plot to form a backstory behind these characters. That's one thing that most stick fights lack.
Thanks for letting me watch.
--Production-- = 16/20
--Watchability-- = 16/20
--Genius-- = 15/20
--Flair-- = 16/20
--Tilt-- = 15/20
OVERALL SCORE: 78/100
VERDICT: Quite Excellent! [A-]
The art is pretty fantastic. Your drawing of the (marshmellow head?) man is unique and loveable. The eyes betray his soul - slits of sarcasm and bitterment. The animation is sparingly used, but very good quality. A good start.
Short and snappy, it's a tale of a pessimistic character and a cheeky flower. Very touchingly displayed, but perhaps too brief to bring about any real criticism. You've got the quality. Now we need more.
Very cleverly drawn and artistically envisioned. Need to bring something more to the table than just a man getting squirted at though. I would like to see some sort o f ongoing warfare between the two. Like next thing the man pulls out a water gun, and then the flower pulls out a real pistol. Then the weapons will get bigger and bigger, until they destroy each other. Then they become friends.
Very unique and loveable character, Richard Guts is. He lets the flower squirt him without retaliating. A victim of society, he stares at the viewer as if to say, "See what I have to put up with?" You do the expressions very well and looking forward to further elaborations.
I'm sure you know this is short by now. That's why you called it a short. But yet even for a short it contains too little detail. It's like a micro-snippet, more like. Hard to come to any sort of conclusions about this, but it is a good taste of what is to come. And that may be magnificent.
--Production-- = 16/20
--Watchability-- = 15/20
--Genius-- = 13/20
--Flair-- = 14/20
--Tilt-- = 13/20
OVERALL SCORE: 71/100
VERDICT: Getting Great! [B+]
Nice and light
Was pretty top notch. The art was amazing, the animations mostly pleasant to see - it was all Peachy. If you don't mind me using the pun. A few flaws such as the absence of an outline for the base of arms when they move, and long pauses between people speaking are minimal. The one thing I would work on is making things quicker and snappier, because as you said, 7 minutes is kind of lengthy.
I chuckled a few times at the jokes. Most of them were overused and safe, but I felt good inside as I listened to you unpretentiously keep our interest. You weren't trying to be overly funny, only at some points. The repeated "Oh SNAP" got annoying after a while but that was a minor irk. Mostly enjoyable.
The idea for making a different ending to the Mario Anime was a slightly questionable idea, partly because not many people watched the Mario Anime anyway, let alone right to the end. Your voicework was impeccable, the humour constant and involving. Definitely a lot of work has gone into this, and I would say that quantity does not always mean better. Some of the greatest flashes on this site are only half a minute long. It's just because they put a lot of work into that half a minute to make it amazing instead of long.
Your style of humour is not really my type of humour. It seems only a notch above fart jokes and slapstick, so remember to cater to all different types of humour. Try to get some other writers in to help you with jokes to make a variety of stuff. You never know, you might stumble upon a winner.
Cute, amiable, funny and epic, this is a great flash with a long runtime. Some parts droop in quality because of the length, but that is something that is improved on with practice. There is definitely a lot of potential here. Thanks for letting me watch, it's been a pleasure.
--Production-- = 16/20
--Watchability-- = 15/20
--Genius-- = 14/20
--Flair-- = 15/20
--Tilt-- = 16/20
OVERALL SCORE: 76/100
VERDICT: Quite excellent! (A-)
Really enjoyed your review. I'm glad that you were able to see the flash for what it is even when it wasn't your style of humor. Thought you brought up some great points for improvement as well. Thanks for the review.
Simple loading bar is well made but that's about it. I bet you knew you were going to get some sort of reaction when you made this. But hey, that's the whole point, isn't it?
Nobody likes to be told they're dumb, ESPECIALLY when they're doing you a favour. You requested a review, you're getting one - this was utterly boring to watch. Very little if any comic relief, and that only at the expense of the watcher. Poor humour.
It was a good idea, but poorly executed. I would have liked to see a few more gimmicks or add-ons to make this a full-fledged flash, and I was kind of waiting for a better "gotcha" moment. Instead it kept going on and on and on.
Again, great idea. The plot is interesting, but very basic and unsatisfying ending. Good graphics.
I don't like loading screens, so why do this to me? You already know, don't you? Thanks for letting me watch.
--Production-- = 00/20
--Watchability-- = 00/20
--Genius-- = 01/20
--Flair-- = 00/20
--Tilt-- = 00/20
OVERALL SCORE: 01/100
Thankyou for enjoying it.
I will take your response on board with future flash endeavours.
I just love kinetic typography and HL2 and this is as great as either gets! Well done!
Very nice stuff
pretty amazing stuff with the santa. all of it is a bit random though. i don't really understand how you did it all. it's not that similar to most things out there. a lot of it is in clay or live action, it's really quite interesting. you're a very good animator
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